Writing Task 1: Can you locate the problem?

What's wrong with this description?
Here's a sentence that a student recently wrote in relation to 'Part-time work' and 'Unemployment'.Similar numbers of students followed their careers with part-time work or were unemployed - 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.There is something significantly wrong with the sentence. Can you identify the problem? Write your answer in a comment box below.

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