General Training Task 1: Opening Salutation
Do you know what's wrong with the beginning of this letter?
The problem is with the name, 'Tom'. In English, we never use the first or 'christian' name of a person when it follows 'Mr'. Consider a person named Aaron Smith. In English, we would formally refer to this man as 'Mr Smith' and NOT 'Mr Aaron'.
By the student referring to the person as 'Mr Tom', it would make the examiner think that he/she doesn't understand the correct English conventions. This would be a negative in the mind of the examiner.
Suggestion: Make sure you use common last/family names in your opening salutation. Here are some examples:
Dear Mr Jones
Dear Mr Clark
Make sure you get your opening right!