IELTS & TOEFL Writing: Make these 'all or nothing' statements more suitable.

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edited May 2017 in IELTS Test
The following sentences were written in student's essays.  The problem with them is that they are 'all or nothing' statements. Remember, a good essay avoids making statements that are too strong.

Task: Read the examples and then try to make them less 'all or nothing' (strong sounding).  When you have finished, check our sample answers.

1. Working mothers are the cause of juvenile delinquency.


Working mothers may be one of the causes of juvenile delinquency.

Many feel that working mothers are one of the causes of juvenile delinquency.

 

2. Married women are out of the home and working hard.


Many married women are often out of the home and working hard.

 

3. When married women are not at home, their juveniles cause many problems.


It appears that when married women are not at home, their juvenile children can cause problems.

 

4. It is the most serious problem in society now.


It is one of the most serious problems in our society now.

 

5. If they are not taught to recognise healthy food, children will eat unhealthy foods every time and this will carry on through their lives.


If they are not taught to recognise healthy food, children may choose unhealthy food options – a habit that may continue throughout their lives.


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